10Eng-Q&A for Class Essay

Introduction

Catch’em: Too expensive, too uncomfortable, and too unsuitable.

Thesis: The Hornby High School uniform should be changed.

List of points: This is because it costs too much, it is unbearably irritating to wear, and it is unsuitable for the different seasons.

S] Some Hornby families can not afford the school uniform.

E] For example, some caregivers find the $130 jacket too excessive.

X] This is because they need the money for other necessities such as food, power, and rent. This is a terrible situation for substantially sized Whānau.

Y] Do we want our students to be starving, cold or homeless, just for the school uniform?

S] Not only is it too expensive, but it is extremely uncomfortable as well.

E] For instance, the socks, jersey, and skirts are all teeth-gnawingly trapping and itchy.

X] This distracts from learning. We want our students always ready-to-learn.

Y] This doesn’t suit its purpose, does it?

S] As well as the uniform being too expensive and uncomfortable, it is inappropriate for certain weather conditions.

E] We see this when students are wearing non-regulation jackets or jerseys to be warm when it is cold and wet.

X] “The skirts are far too cold on a wildly wet and windy winter’s day,” said Kirsty, a year 10 student.

Y] Jaymee - another year 10 student - commented that they could also end up dying from hypothermia if the uniform does not change.

Restate Thesis: Change the school uniform now!

Restate List of Points: Why? Because it costs too much, it is Horrible and intolerable to wear, and it is totally ill-equipped for New Zealand’s moody Mother Nature.

Punch Line: A better quality uniform will result in better quality learning.